No I understand the concept, but it doesn't seem to fit in there, like something lost in translation or do I feel like this because I'm not a native English speaker?
Interesting premise. I love these alternate realty takes. The possibilities are limitless, as William White demonstrates here in just the first chapter. Absurd and intriguing at the same time. You have to wonder what the hell's going to happen next.
Love the daughter. I have one. They're just like that.
I could imagine a hole in my ceiling tearing open and spilling a goat-thing out and my daughter reacting in a similar fashion. That's impressive, putting the personality of a teenager so deftly onto the page (I can only assume the author has one, too?).
Between absurdity, humor, and existential glitch, a universe is born that feels more real than ours. You’ve built a world where the cracks matter more than the walls. A comedy of cosmic interference, laced with a melancholic truth:
that even in our own homes, we’re never fully in control.
Thank you very much for the wonderful comment! There is no happier person than me right now. It is an extreme pleasure for me when the reader feels what I have put into the text as an idea. Thank you!
I had such a good time reading it! It’s a bizarre world in the best way. The mix of humor, mystery, and that completely unexpected romantic dinner made it so entertaining. I’m super curious to see where the goat situation goes next!
I really liked your writing! I love the detailed way you describe the world. It's vivid and makes me feel like I'm in there, and even the way you describe the tone in a conversation makes me hear it in my head.
“But won't the goat get in your way?”
“Which 'us'?”
Um I didn't get the word play here.
Ha, it's something like this.
Mother: Hey, who ate all the candy?
Child: I don't know, Mom. I haven't seen any mint candies.
Mother: But I didn't say they were mints.
Child: Ah…
No I understand the concept, but it doesn't seem to fit in there, like something lost in translation or do I feel like this because I'm not a native English speaker?
It's simple. In English, "your" is the same for singular and plural.
Yes, so shouldn't the reply be, "who? Us?" That's what I'm confused about.
Interesting premise. I love these alternate realty takes. The possibilities are limitless, as William White demonstrates here in just the first chapter. Absurd and intriguing at the same time. You have to wonder what the hell's going to happen next.
Love the daughter. I have one. They're just like that.
I could imagine a hole in my ceiling tearing open and spilling a goat-thing out and my daughter reacting in a similar fashion. That's impressive, putting the personality of a teenager so deftly onto the page (I can only assume the author has one, too?).
Thanks William!
Thank you very much, David. It is a real pleasure to read your comment. Yes, I have two.
Dear William White,
Like a fracture in the fabric of reality,
your piece isn’t read, it’s experienced.
Between absurdity, humor, and existential glitch, a universe is born that feels more real than ours. You’ve built a world where the cracks matter more than the walls. A comedy of cosmic interference, laced with a melancholic truth:
that even in our own homes, we’re never fully in control.
—Solivagus
Thank you very much for the wonderful comment! There is no happier person than me right now. It is an extreme pleasure for me when the reader feels what I have put into the text as an idea. Thank you!
I'm intrigued what is going to happen. Is truly a story that capture the attention and have a lot of creative ideas 🌹.
Oh, these are words that caress my ears. Thank you with all my heart!
Love your sense of humor and the mastery of creating awkward situations in your book)) Absolutely don't want to be in Leonard's shoes!
Thank you for the kind words, Ludmilla! I felt that way too when I was creating this character.
I had such a good time reading it! It’s a bizarre world in the best way. The mix of humor, mystery, and that completely unexpected romantic dinner made it so entertaining. I’m super curious to see where the goat situation goes next!
Thank you very much, Ana! It is such a pleasure for me to hear these kind words!
I really liked your writing! I love the detailed way you describe the world. It's vivid and makes me feel like I'm in there, and even the way you describe the tone in a conversation makes me hear it in my head.
Thank you for the wonderful words, Maya! You made my day!
Nice ending! There was so much to unpack here that I can't wait to see what happens next. There's a lot of mystery and intrigue here.
Yes, indeed. Thank you very much, Jeffery! ☺️